【NETWORK】UN: mother's trophy

[applehearted]

[ Forward dated to around 1 AM on April 1st-- ]

I'll be sending over a short sample. This is still a rough draft, so I might change the wording of things later down the line as well, so let me know what you think.

Enveloping the light and darkness of the stars above,
"What did they wish for," you ask of me
Still don't know all the answers even as they continuously cry out

The pain they've captured these passing days
It's like wandering through an endless nightmare
Only one thing is engraved in their soul:
I want more and more and more

Comments

UN: pathetic wet cat

[composalvation]

this is pretty good so far
it fits the flow in the lead-up to the chorus well
i'm not sure if i'm going to change too much of that part, so keeping a similar vibe would be best

[There's a pause as Kanade scrolls back up to skim the lyrics again.... but then-]

............. ah
mafuyu
did you... change your display name?

[applehearted]

[ There's a lengthy pause on her end as she looks through the text and then at Kanade's display name. ]

Not on purpose.

I assume the same goes for you...?

[composalvation]

[mmmmmm she doesn't like this. She barely blinks at her own display name, but...]

ah, i didn't even notice
but yeah, i didn't touch my name at all

... i'd say it's just a glitch, but... those names...

[applehearted]

They're not very nice names.

[composalvation]

mmm, they're really not

[A pause, then-]

... are you feeling okay?

[applehearted]

I'm fine. It's just some silly username prank.

un: cat food eater

[popsometags]

[ He has several... hundred questions. Everything considered, he decides to respond, even this early in the morning. ]

It sounds really bleak.

...is this Mafuyu? When did you change your username?

[applehearted]

Then the tone is getting across, at least.

It is.

[ ... ]

It seems like there's a bug. I didn't change my username myself.

[popsometags]

That's peculiar. I'm going to try to file a complaint to get it changed back.

Actually, I don't know how I would do that.

[ ......... ]

When do you sleep?

[applehearted]

I'll still be up for a couple of hours still. Why?

[popsometags]

You just strike me as someone who would sleep earlier than this.

[applehearted]

Really?

This is usual for me, though.

[popsometags]

[ .........

the screen in front of him flashes for a moment, and Mafuyu gets a picture that's just. This face. ]

[applehearted]

?

[popsometags]

We should really fix your sleep schedule.

[applehearted]

My sleep schedule is fine.

Kanade's is probably worse.

[popsometags]

I'll have to lecture her too then. It's a good way to burn yourself out.

[applehearted]

Are you speaking from experience?

[popsometags]

I hadn't been used to sleeping comfortably until I came here. I would go to school, work, make paper roses, and then fall asleep on one of my tatami.

[applehearted]

... I'm not sure that's necessarily a problem of just lack of sleep, Rinne.

[popsometags]

It means my quality of sleep was atrocious. It's a wonder I was able to make it through the day every day.

[applehearted]

I see.

At least you're doing better here, I assume.